Over at YA Buccaneers, we're drumming up excitement around writing flash fiction. I've never tried to write flash fiction before, but I'm game to try just about anything once...so we'll see how this goes. (Post Script: 200 words is HARD! I wrote more like 400 and then had to trim it down. Which saddens me, because I had to trim out the tasty bits.)
Walk The Plank is our monthly Flash Fiction challenge - in other words, write a short snippet that makes the biggest impact. The goal: Write a story in 200 words or fewer, excluding the title, around the monthly theme.
THIS MONTH'S THEME: ADVENTURE
- Write a short flash fiction story in 200 words or fewer, excluding the title, around this month's theme of ADVENTURE!
- For an extra challenge, begin your story with the words, “I set sail” (these three words will be included in the word count).
- And for an even bigger challenge, use the same beginning words and end with the words: "my adventure continues!" (also included in the word count).
- For those who want to prove their Flash Fiction prowess, hit all of the above challenges, PLUS, make your story 200 words EXACTLY!
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The silent, bright death of stars
“Were you seen?”
“I don’t think so.”
Even with the distance, we kept our voices low. He had
more to fear than I. If we were discovered, I’d be cast out, whipped perhaps.
He’d be killed in the mud like a diseased animal. He touched my face with his
fingers. This simple gesture he could never do in public, made my insides
collapse like a waterfall at my feet. I closed my eyes. He led me by the
fingers like a child who would be lost. His skin underneath my hands was dark
and strange. I kissed the brand that marked him the property of another man. I
glanced to see if he would view this gesture with horror, but his face wore an
expression of curious wonder that my lips would touch his skin. And my kiss, it
left a different sort of brand.
Look at you GO with your bad self!
ReplyDeleteExcellent, excellent writing, my friend - I am so happy you took a stab at this! And definitely think you should consider writing more flash fiction, because this...well, it was AWESOME.
My favorite line:
This simple gesture he could never do in public, made my insides collapse like a waterfall at my feet.
Aaaahhhhh. Just awesome, Kris. Loved it!
Awww...thanks!
DeleteI love that you can just write one snippet of a scene with Walk The Plank/Flash Fiction. My problem....I kept typing. And typing. Because dammit I want to give these characters a little more to be going on with. *wink* And then I had to cut it all. Boo.
I LOVED your piece as well. So much fun!! (Anyone reading this who hasn't read it should go jump on Erin's blog and Read It Now! (I'll wait) *drums fingers* See...I told you!)
That was beautiful! Fabulous job getting it down to 200 words.
ReplyDeleteI've never written flash fiction either. I won't have time to fit it in this month but hopefully next! I'm glad we're doing this at YAB. :)
Thanks! I can't wait to see what you come up with, because I just know it's going to be awesome!!
DeleteAnd this was so much fun, I think I'm going to be hooked. Is there such a thing as a Flash Fiction Junkie? :)
Oooh - I love this! Nice job. It's very atmospheric. I'm sad not to read those other 200 words you wrote! :)
ReplyDeleteI LOVED your piece too! I wanted to comment on it, but I'm getting an error message when I try. I tried 3 times because...boy do you have a way with words! (Could be human error with the error messages...lack of sleep and all. I sort of stayed up all night reading Outlander. I blame you. :)
DeleteWonderful writing, Kris! This really had a great sense of time and place. I wanted to know more about the characters and how they came to be there, which was obviously such a difficult thing for both of them. 200 words seems impossible to me, but I'm going to give it a try....
ReplyDeleteExcellent!
Thanks Heidi! And I know what you mean, 200 words is not easy. I had to cut a ton of words. Apparently, I don't do short. :)
DeleteCan't wait to read yours. I'll have to pop on over to your blog to check it out.